Virtual Schools

Virtual schools are schools that are based on the new technology of the 21st century. They are different from other schools in their teaching methods. Unlike regular schools, Virtual schools teach their students on the internet, through online lessons. The teacher talks to the pupils through a microphone and the students can ask questions at(ww.) the chat.

On the one hand, virtual schools use very advanced technology and it looks like a better way to teach the students. The lessons are on line, talking to the teacher by using a microphone, which gives them the option to be everywhere they want. It also motivates to(מיותר) the pupils to study, and they can not bother each other like (they do) in class.

On the other hand, virtual schools can not have the advantage, like(ww. - of) working together in class, feeling what the teacher is trying to "pass" them with his body movement.(phr.- you are translating this from Hebrew. Look for a different way of explaining your slef ) There are some disadvantages to online schools, like technical problems. (what other disadvantages are there? It seems you haven't completed this paragraph properly).

To sum up, I think that virtuals schools can be a very good teaching way(ww.), but they can not replace the old, regular schools. Our technology is not good enough to solve all the problems at(ww.) online schools and I think we should keep the old fashion way, and study in the regular schools.

A bit better, but there is still work to do.
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Daphna

45 Hofyen street
Holon
3 December 2009



Mrs. Gilat Simon
Principal
Kugel High School
1 Mota-gur street
Holon

Dear Madam,

Every year Israei students and teachers go on a trip to Poland. This trip is very important to Israelis and Jews. I am writing to complain because many children in my school want to take part in the trip, but some of them are not able to go because of the high price of the trip.

First of all, students and teachers go on this trip all over the country every year.
The journey is planned by the the ministry of Education for any 11th grade student in every school. The main idea of this trip is to preserve the memory of the Holocaust and teach the new generation about it.

In addiotion, the journey and the kids who go to Poland keep the ceremony(what? don't you mean - memory?) in our country alive to "remember and never forget". It just shows how is(מיותר) the journey is important. But, just like I said before, it is too expensive, although the government is able to fund some of the money.

In conclusion I am very disappointed about(ww. - with) the "tries(ww.- attempts)" to help kids who can not afford the money for the journey. I think that the government can use some money from the education buget and pay some of the funds.

I look forward to a propmt reply.

Sincerely yours,

Shoval Yosef


This is better. Good work.
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Daphna