Formal Letter

34 Even Gvirol street

Tel Aviv

2 1 September 2009

Ms. Jane Green
Gordon high school
5 Sandro street
Haifa

Dead Ms. Green,

I saw your article about yough(sp.) that don't join the army or civil service.
I would like to add some information to your article about that, not enough people serve the community

Your article mentions that our country isn't large and powerful enough to allow its citizens not to serve the community. I would like to add that our country surround of Arab countries, which don't like us or even want to kill us. - and so? what is your point here?

In addition, people that don't join the army have an advantage compared to people that serve the community. Someone who doesn't join the army and starts his life has an advantage compared to someone who joined the army at the age of 18-21(Explain - what kind of advantage?). We can't live in such a society.(Explain - why does the society suffer from this?)

To sum up, there are not enough people that join the army and serve the community, which causes a problem to our society. There are different ways to solve it, but I think we should try everything together (This last sentence is n't saying anything. If there are "different ways to slove it", why don't you suggest one? and what do you mean by: "we should try everything together"?).

Sincerely yours,

Shoval Yosef

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Daphna